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An early morning on the seventeenth of June,
A letter laced with tears, remember to stay cool,
And I wish that I could always be true,
And I wish that I’d always be with you,

I take a shower, put on shirt and tie,
Black’s your favorite color, I don’t know quite why,
I slowly walk to your new house, a stroll down memory lane,
Father lets me in, but it doesn’t ease my pain,
And I wish that I could always be true,
And I wish that I’d always be with you,

I say a couple words, still fumbling,
I bought a bunch of roses, for nothing,
I see you lying there asleep,
I can’t believe you’d forget me,

As we walk out the door,
You climb up on my shoulder,
You feel heavier somehow,
I wipe the beads of sweat from my brow,

I cry a rain of tears as they lay you in the ground,
I lay the bunch of roses on your new bed,
I know I’ll join you soon, as I put the gun to my head,
©2003-2009 ~creeront
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Woke up early on the seventeenth of june...

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:iconxeroriskfactor:
so sad, so depressing, so touching, so real. i cant think of the right words to describe this, so i will use the 2 most descriptive i know
fucking amazing. :plusfav:
:iconnihilim:
It's not often I see good love poetry. The imagery here was excellent.

I think the apostropge in front of " father" is a typo. Father should also be capitalized, I think.

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:iconnikics:
wow ~ good lead, good timing, I'm getting teary eyed, so must have done something right... you keep the curtain closed until the very end, when the true motivations reveal...

I like the comma at the end.
:icontaelianessa:
Wow... This is incredibly powerful, it made me tear up a bit. Very well-written, I like how you reveal in the last stanza what really went on. I'm blown away by the imagery and details. :+fav:
:icontigress86:
this is really good. the fact that u kept us waitin till the end to reveal wat was truly goin on is an excellent thng. i really like this. its touching and well written and actually has proly wuite a few ppl that can relate to this. good job!
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:iconguitarsmurf22:
Fantastic KC, i remember reading this years back...

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